Mar 29, 2013


Visual Dare #13

The presence of the fog sent chills down his spine as he waded between the pylons, flinching as the rotten wood flaked away at his touch.  His heart had not paused from its frantic beat since he first entered the calm mist; waiting for it to rise and consume him like it had so many before, ready to vanish at the slightest disturbance.  Yet a small part ignored the terror of what he was trying to do, and revelled in the salty foam that swirled around him, splashing at his waist.  He could almost feel its icy cold caress, taste the salt as it coated his skin, and wished to sit above, leaning out from the bridge to gaze across an ocean broiling with colour and life.  Instead he gripped the next post and pushed on; praying he was right and the other side held more than just death.

word count: 150

ghost boy,
Jaq xx


  1. I loved the imagery especially going through the water,sent chills.

  2. Chilling and mystic... very nice

  3. I liked this one - protagonist leaving behind the halcyon days of yesterday as they escape the death of the land and toil towards an uncertain future. The stuff I think dystopias are made of.

  4. Gorgeously crafted. The last line was a pleasant surprise for me --- up till then I thought he was bent on taking his life. Now I wonder what it is he expects to find...

  5. Riveting writing...hooked me right in. And personally really like the ending. Well done!

  6. This reminded me of 'Sabriel' by Garth Nix, very evocative and leaves me wondering what was on the other side of the water...

  7. Like Lisa, I want to know what's on the other side as well. This is beautiful! I don't know where you find (take) your pictures, but they are GORGEOUS!

    I'm always inspired to write when I stop by!

  8. Thank you so much for your comments, I really thought I would struggle with this image :)

    @Daisy check out Angela's Visual Dare, some great black and white photography to be found.


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