Visual Dare #13
Atmospheric
The presence of the fog sent chills down his spine as he
waded between the pylons, flinching as the rotten wood flaked away at his touch. His heart had not paused from its frantic
beat since he first entered the calm mist; waiting for it to rise and consume
him like it had so many before, ready to vanish at the slightest disturbance. Yet a small part ignored the terror of what
he was trying to do, and revelled in the salty foam that swirled around him, splashing
at his waist. He could almost feel its
icy cold caress, taste the salt as it coated his skin, and wished to sit above,
leaning out from the bridge to gaze across an ocean broiling with colour and
life. Instead he gripped the next post
and pushed on; praying he was right and the other side held more than just
death.
word count: 150
ghost boy,
Jaq xx
I loved the imagery especially going through the water,sent chills.
ReplyDeleteChilling and mystic... very nice
ReplyDeleteI liked this one - protagonist leaving behind the halcyon days of yesterday as they escape the death of the land and toil towards an uncertain future. The stuff I think dystopias are made of.
ReplyDeleteGorgeously crafted. The last line was a pleasant surprise for me --- up till then I thought he was bent on taking his life. Now I wonder what it is he expects to find...
ReplyDeleteRiveting writing...hooked me right in. And personally really like the ending. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThis reminded me of 'Sabriel' by Garth Nix, very evocative and leaves me wondering what was on the other side of the water...
ReplyDeleteLike Lisa, I want to know what's on the other side as well. This is beautiful! I don't know where you find (take) your pictures, but they are GORGEOUS!
ReplyDeleteI'm always inspired to write when I stop by!
Thank you so much for your comments, I really thought I would struggle with this image :)
ReplyDelete@Daisy check out Angela's Visual Dare, some great black and white photography to be found.